Here are a few comments on your comments from the eyes of a 9k...
Move 6: I would have probably reinforced the top corner...n17, 017 while extending out the other direction... though if i was to extend towards that

stone I would have extend from the bottom corner around R8...
Move 11: Not a bad idea to move into his territory, but a look at the board says a bigger move would be somewhere at the bottom of the board...
Move 13: I think an extension out towards the center would have been better...
Move 17: I dont see the purpose of this move... you can still map out more framework...
Move 19: not sure if it is right, but I prefer line 3 extensions over line 4 extensions because they are harder to invade under...
Move 20: See comment about move 13... that extension towards the center would have helped prevent this...
Move 23-25: If white extends to J9 after that h10 cut you talk about, that makes the cut almost useless I think...
Move 31: An attachment here is slow I think... an extension would be worth more...
Move 51: Maybe playing somewhere at L8 to try to start to close of that possible moyo area is better?
Move 67: L2 is a huge cut... should have played there first maybe...
Move 75: I think k16 would have been better....
Move 77: L16 would prevent your middle group from capture though sacrifice a bit of the side territory... I think the middle group is worth more...
Move 85: Double Tigers mouth is a strong defense, but I think playing that stone somehwere else is better... if white cuts at p15, then black o16, ... now white can only atari at q14, or p13... if q14 black attach p13... if p13 black attach q14, white attach q13, black attach r14, white r13, black attach s13 etc...
Move 95: s14 is a must....
Move 103: its a good idea to mess with... if ignored you capture a group.. this kind of cut comes in handy in some endgame situations too... just wasn't the right situation here...
Move 119: if you are trying to create eyespace I say stick with a standard extension first. 2 point jump maybe? Thats probably your best chance... like maybe to c6 which threatens whites corner... if he plays to protect the corner jump to c9.. now at least you have a base to work with...
Move 127: L8 is better... current move is just taking away your own territory....
As far as your comments are going nice job.... its great that you are reviewing your own games like this... that is something I need to do more of... very good reading on your comments for 24k... I wouldn't be surprised to see your rank grow fast in the near future...
